Sign up for my mailing list!
Sparkle Blog Sparkle
Saturday, 11 September 2021


For a PDF of a plain text version of this wish list with dark print on white background, click here.

What is Pitch Wars, you ask? Pitch Wars is a mentoring program. Teams of published/agented authors, editors, or industry interns choose one writer each and spend about three months working with the writer on revising their manuscript. It ends in February with an Agent Showcase, during which agents read a pitch/first page and can request to read more.

We (Kim Long and Jennifer L. Brown) are returning as MIDDLE GRADE mentors this year! Last year was our third year working together as #TeamKrakenBee, and we loved it so much that we’re back for more!

We’ve split our wish list into two posts. Below, you’ll find a bit more about us, the genres we’re looking for, what manuscripts are better suited for our fellow MG mentors, and what you can expect if we choose you as our mentee. Over at Jennifer’s website, you’ll find tropes/concepts we love, a glimpse behind the scenes into our process as mentors and testimonials from our faboo mentees from 2018, 2019, and 2020!



This is my sixth year mentoring middle grade. I’ve been writing kidlit for about nine years now, and my debut, Lexi Magill and the Teleportation Trek Tournament, was published on October 1, 2019! I’ve had quite the publishing journey (Lexi was the third book I wrote and it went on sub with two agents before selling.) To me, Pitch Wars is about sharing what I’ve learned in my journey and helping writers improve so this or the next manuscript will be the one to get you an agent and/or published!

JENNIFER L. BROWN (i.e. Jenny B)

I am a proud member of the Pitch Wars mentee class of 2017. As a mentee, I learned boatloads from my awesomesauce mentors and now life companions, Tara and Jenna. After Pitch Wars, I dove, belly flopped, and swam in the querying trenches with my shiny manuscript and a few months later, I found an awesome agent. Last year was my third year mentoring, and I cannot wait for year four!


The krakenbee is ready to help you wrangle your manuscript into shape!

What We’re Interested In:

This year it all comes down to one thing: a story with a speculative element. It can be horror, fantasy, sci-fi, or fabulism/magical realism—we love it all! It’s just important that your story contains some sort of speculative element that takes it out of our everyday, non-magical world.

Some of our favorite stories with speculative or fantastical elements take place in other worlds, like Nevermoor, Furthermore, The Girl Who Drank the Moon, Goldeline, The Adventurer’s Guide to Successful Escapes, The Hatmakers, and A Wish in the Dark

We also love stories with a speculative element that take place in our world, like The Gauntlet, Quintessence, Savvy, A Snicker of Magic, Fablehaven, Midsummer’s Mayhem, York, Aru Shah, Ghost Squad, Cattywampus, Malamander, and of course our former mentee’s book The Mutant Mushroom Takeover

Some favorite Horror stories with a speculative element include Small Spaces, The Jumbies, Doll Bones, Splendor and Glooms, and May Bird.

And we also love Sci-fi stories with a speculative element, like Jinxed, Seventh Grade vs. the Galaxy, and The True Meaning of Smekday.

This is not an exhaustive list! At all! Steampunk is great! Weird is awesome— Un Lun Dun or The Iremonger Trilogy or something that mashes genres, is wildly creative, and filled with heart is more than welcome! We would be thrilled to read your brilliance as long as there is some twinge of the fantastical.

A few caveats:

We’re doing upper middle grade, which is geared toward readers at the upper range of the 8-13 age level. That tends to mean stories around the 40,000-65,000 word count range.  Since we love upper middle grade, we tend to shy away from stories where fairies, unicorns, pixies, etc. have a featured role. Simply because those stories tend to skew younger, and we have a hard time connecting with those adventures. If your story features one of these characters, you may have better luck submitting to a different mentor team.

We also have a hard time connecting with portal stories that involve the main character being transported from our world to a magical land where they need to complete some sort of quest. If your story is a portal, you might find better luck with another mentor team.

Now, for a word on . . . INCLUSIVITY

We both love diverse stories, particularly those written by marginalized authors. Importantly, if you are from a marginalized community, do not feel like your book must be about that marginalization! Uh, no, not at all. Give us a unique world, great story, and we’re all in! Now more than ever, the world needs to hear from marginalized voices. 

We’ve mentioned a few of our recent favorites elsewhere on this wish list, but we love stories that include an authentic cultural perspective with a fantastical backdrop like Aru Shah, Love Sugar Magic, Ghost Squad, The Jumbies, and A Wish in the Dark.

We would love all the authors who submit to us to write inclusively. Your cast should reflect the world in which we live, and that means people from all walks of life with all sorts of backgrounds. However, we caution cis-White authors about featuring a marginalized main character if you do not belong to that group. We strongly believe that, until publishing offers equal opportunities to marginalized groups, books featuring marginalized main characters written by cis-White authors are taking opportunities away from marginalized authors.

Please visit Lee and Low’s website for a breakdown on the lack of BIPOC authors in publishing for more information: Diversity Survey


Overall, we want to fall in love with a story. Voice, yes. Humor, yes. Concept, yes, and then . . . a mentee who has a polished manuscript but is open to revising and even gutting characters or sub-plots if it makes the manuscript better. Declining a suggestion/revision because it’s too much work is not acceptable to us. Please do not sub to us if you are not open to considering massive revisions or changes.

Pitch Wars is for writers who are seeking developmental help with their manuscript, whether pacing, plot, character arc, or overall structure. We want a mentee who will consider our suggestions and then run with them. We’ll shine a light on things that need revising, whether that’s adding an inner journey, an outer journey, a plot element, solidifying the emotional aspects, or whatever the fix is. We’re not going to tell you what to write. We’re going to tell you why something isn’t working, whether it’s internal plot inconsistencies or character/emotional arc authenticity. We are so happy to brainstorm revision ideas with you about how to fix it, but the story is yours. We’ll never say: you must revise this way.  

We love helping writers. Outside of Pitch Wars, we are critique partners. We bounce revision ideas off one another. As our mentee, we want you to join our team!



For more info on whether you might be a fit for us, continue HERE to Jenny B’s blog for Team KrakenBee’s Wish List of Dreams, part 2. There you’ll find:  

  1. Tropes and Concepts We Love

  2. A Peek Behind the Curtain into our submission process, and what to expect if you become our mentee

  3. Notes from our 2018, 2019, and 2020 mentees: Summer Short, L.K. Frank, and Malcolm Schmitz.

  4. Even more gifs

Thanks for reading, and remember: #TeamKrakenBee wants YOU!

Visit or click on a link below to visit the other MG Mentors’ wish lists!

Pitch Wars 2021 Middle Grade Mentors’ Wish Lists

  1. Tracy Badua
  2. Eric Bell
  3. Julie Artz
  4. Shannon A. Thompson and Sandra Proudman
  5. George Jreije and LQ Nguyen
  6. Darlene P. Campos
  7. Rebecca Petruck
  8. Graci Kim and Karah Sutton
  9. Shakirah Bourne
  10. Kim Long and Jennifer L. Brown
  11. Adrianna Cuevas and Sarah Kapit
  12. Sylvia Liu
  13. Cindy Baldwin and Amanda Rawson Hill
  14. Erin Teagan
  15. A.J. Sass and Nicole Melleby

Click here to view all Pitch Wars 2021 Mentors’ Wish Lists. To view the wish lists by genre, visit this link.

Filed: Uncategorized

8 responses to “Pitch Wars 2021! #TeamKrakenBee Returns!”

    • Teri Stevens says:


      My manuscript is upper middle grade, with a 34,000 word count, which falls short of your preferred number. Should I submit knowing it’s not the requested length? Many thanks.

      • Kim Long says:

        Hi Teri. Thanks for your question! As long as you are willing to work to increase the word count, it’s not a problem at all. Our 2020 mentee’s book was around that length, and he realized it needed more substance for an upper MG and worked on it in revisions.

        • Judy Broad says:

          Hi Kim and Teri. I had the exact same question as we are such a good fit in many ways. One of the things I hope to achieve if I’m selected is to get some guidance on increasing my word count without meaningless padding.

        • Teri says:

          Perfect! My goal is to grow the book with the help of my mentor.
          Many thanks! Teri

  1. Siana LaForest says:

    Hello! I was wondering how you two felt about previous PitchWars mentees reapplying. I am a former mentee, but in YA (2019).

  2. […] Kim Long and Jennifer L. Brown […]

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *

Kim Long

Kim Long’s debut middle grade Lexi Magill and the Teleportation Trek Tournament will release in Fall 2019 by Running Press Kids.

Learn More

Recent Posts



Stay Connected!